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A Christmas Carol in 3-D

Monday, November 23rd, 2009

This weekend, my wife and I went to watch Disney’s new 3-D movie, A Christmas Carol.

A warning for anyone who has not seen the movie or read the novel: Spoilers abound below.

As I watched the movie, I couldn’t help but notice how much the movie tied into the novel:  In fact, Robert Zemeckis seemed to try hard to remind movie watchers that the movie was inspired by the book (not the other way around).

In fact, the movie even starts out with a book flipping to the first page:

Marley was dead, to begin with.

From the first scene, it was also clear that Zemeckis wanted to do something different with the movie than had been done before (besides making it in 3-D animation).  In the beginning, Zemeckis shows how Scrooge is a stingy miser–giving even one gold piece from his heavy purse is painful, and giving a second is as if he were slicing into his own hand.

A Christmas Carol

A Christmas Carol

In fact, separating from each coin is so painful that he removes the two coins weighing down his recently deceased friend’s eyes.

This was a brilliant method of conveying both Scrooge’s miserly ways and the fact that he cared for nothing more than gaining an extra coin in his stack, all in a very short time frame.

As a screenplay, Zemeckis did a good job of using the elements that have been shown in films before, while also showing off some of the new technologies that we can do with today’s technology.

I loved the way that Zemeckis used the aging of wood and brick to show time passing (without moving the camera).

While watching the movie in 3-D, I noticed something else that struck me:  transitions between places, which is typically shortened in movies, were actually lengthened in this movie.  The journey, which is really what books are about, becomes much more important in the 3-D form.

Part of me wonders if, in a decade or so, when 3-D movies are more common, traveling between places will shorten again–as developers are concerned less about trying something technically challenging and more on creating deeper stories.

Perhaps my favorite part of the movie was the way Zemeckis chose to handle fear:  rather than focusing on something “scary” and trying to make people jump, he chose instead to focus on the feelings Scrooge was experiencing–showing a trembling lip, widened eyes, breathing quickly.  Though this was a movie, the idea is sound–to truly communicate that something is scary, show it through your character’s reaction, not through trying to add blood and guts.

Still, I thought this was a good retelling of the old story.  In a lot of ways, I think adding the third dimension truly does add some depth to the old tale.  And, of course, the tale ended with the traditional, well put ending, “God bless Us, Every One.”

This version of the movie also referred back a few times to the fact that this story has been around for more than 160 years. I felt a bit of awe in the idea that a short novella has had such an impact on our society for such a long time.  Charles Dickens’s story has achieved a level of immortality that I think all authors strive to match.

What makes the tale so memorable?

I’d guess it’s the idea that someone as unlikeable as Scrooge, when confronted with the choices he had made throughout his life, can be struck with a sudden epiphany and completely change his outlook on life.  No one is irredeemable–anyone can make the decision to start living life in a more compassionate manner.

When writing your own work, keep in mind the core message of your story. Are there ways for your characters to reflect on their own past, and make decisions differently?  Are there ways that a character can realize he/she is on the wrong path, and make steps towards a new direction?

Who knows, perhaps your novel is the next one to have an impact for the next 160 years!

When Should You Use “It”?

Monday, November 9th, 2009

Last week, I was a bit surprised at the attention received by one of my posts from the middle of October, Get Rid of “It” (and other vague words).  The post was submitted to Reddit, and received a somewhat controversial rating.  The ratings were mostly positive, but the comments were somewhat less so, indicating that (perhaps) my message hadn’t gotten completely across.

On the positive side, I think that article received the most comments any of my articles has received.  Thanks to all the Reddit commenters who took the time to say why they agreed or disagreed with me!

I’m not writing this post directly to those commenters, but I do think it is important to respond to the flaw pointed out by the comments.  As one commenter pointed out, general rules may hurt writers if the writer doesn’t understand when to break the rule.  I felt I should clarify my message to help all writers who read this blog.

I think the major reason that the Reddit commenters disagreed with my post was that I went a bit too far with the selection of my title.  When I said, “Get Rid of ‘It’,” I was referring (mostly) to the overuse of “it” in many new writers’ work.  As a few Reddit commenters (correctly) pointed out, “it” is a perfectly good word, if used carefully.

My intention is not to eliminate the word “it” from the English language. However, writers need to be careful to balance the convenience of “it” with the vagueness “it” introduces.  New writers tend to use “it” too often in their work, which makes understanding their intended meaning difficult.

Many writers use “it” as a crutch. Instead of thinking about the concept a writer desires to convey, many beginning writers throw in the word “it” to shorten their writing, but this puts the burden of figuring out the message on the reader.  Taking a bit more effort to clarify your message can save your readers a lot of time.

Speaking of saving time, let’s get to the main event.  When should you use “it”?

Use “it” to refer to an object that has no gender:

The bookcase was lovely, its oaken shelves a beautiful shade of brown.

The water bottle let out a sharp hiss as I squeezed its trigger, water spraying out in a narrow stream.

Use “it” to refer to an event (in the examples, “It” refers to the weather):

It was a blustery day in the Hundred Acre Woods.

It was a dark and stormy night.

Use “it” when you can substitute any number of things and still make the sentence true:

Forget about it, it will never happen.

It will be a cold day in Hell when that happens.

Use “it” when the surrounding context makes the meaning clear:

We loved that restaurant.  Its food was delicious, its atmosphere was pleasant, and its waiters were always prompt.

Can we continue this conversation later?  I’d really love for Janice to hear it.

Also, while we’re talking about “it,” let’s also get one commonly confused thing straight:

Its color was green.  It’s standing still.

In other words, “its” implies ownership or a characteristic of something.  “It’s” is used only to refer to “It is” or “It has.”

Writing is an art, and the use of “it” is no different. Deciding to use “it” in a particular case depends on your goals as a writer–you’re making a choice between clarity and vagueness, or wordiness and brevity.  The right place to use “it” is (unfortunately) often a judgment call.  “It” is a perfectly good word, when a writer carefully considers when to use “it”.

Happy writing!

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